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Hound Dog



by Ouatic-7
AKA Okaasan-7




Summary: Who is the new member of the Inu Tachi? It's not who you think. SesshoumaruXOC.



Her lovely scent arrested his passage and drew him like a child to a confectioner. Hidden away from her importunate suitors the human locks could not thwart his razor claws. Her silky silver hair and limpid pools further ensnared him.


As eager as he, their passion needed no words.


Finally sated, they parted, neither repining.


* * * *



When Kirara dropped the body next to the fire Sango assumed she was offering her catch to the communal pot but then the cat settled down to bathe the limp form. Her rough tongue roused the creature to emit a weak growl as her ministrations revealed a pitifully thin and bruised puppy.


Shippou fed the wee dog tiny shreds of fish until she dozed off. Necessities taken care of they all finally got a good look at her.


It was Miroku who first divined the truth. "Those strangely human ears, the crescent marking, and her demonic aura … Inuyasha, could this puppy be your niece?"






AN: Concrete please. Title suggestions eagerly welcomed.

Mood: twisted
Comments

I'm intrigued enough to want more, and I seldom say that about an OC.

Hidden away from her importunate suitors the human locks could not thwart his razor claws. Her silky silver hair and limpid pools further ensnared him.

This part needs some slight alteration. I like the overall descriptive structure, but it was confusing on the first read-through. When I read 'human locks' I was thinking locks of hair, not a lock on a door, especially since the following sentence mentions her hair. Perhaps there's another word to describe how she is imprisoned?

I'm assuming the OC was human (human locks on the door, human ears on the pup) - if this is not the case, you'll want to take another look at those two items. And will a human have silver hair? The answer can be yes, as long as you establish the reason at some point in the future. (*makes note to check on this item in my own fic...there is a reason for the odd coloring, but I'm not sure if I've mentioned it yet*)

I'd really like to see some more of this. As far as title suggestions, can't think of anything at the moment. I can't come up with titles for my own stuff until I've mentally worked up to five chapters, or in the case of one-shots, when I've finished the darn thing.

Thanks for the suggestions. Clearly I am not comunicating who Sesshoumaru was with as well as I thought I was in the second half. MD had the same problem.

I was thinking inverse of Inuyasha whose mother is human and who has dog ears. Either, I really am twisted or I need to put more hints, or both.

Clarify a bit and repost. I'm really interested.

(Anonymous)

Niece? Who has Sesshoumaru been with? Anxious to find out (:

{Sorry, the anon is me. Didn't mean to double-post. Login issues.}

Niece? Who has Sesshoumaru been with? Anxious to find out (:

I thought I had put in sufficent clues but seeing as the none of the people who read this got it, I guess not.

Good thing I posted here first!

Yeah, good thing you did (: From the phrase, "the human locks", I'm assuming that the woman he {Sesshoumaru?} has been with is human. However, the phrase, "Her silky silver hair" gives me the impression that she is a human with silver hair. I can't recall a human woman with silver hair in the Inuyasha fandom off the top of my head. Perhaps that's where the confusion lies?